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To you I call
Trying to find myself
Only you truly know me
And can bring me back

Help me be alive
Escape this empty void
I need to wake up from this nightmare
My life is not a dream

Force my eyes open
Make me see the truth
Remove the tape from my mouth
And listen to me scream

Save me from drowning
Push my heart to beat
Breath life into me
And help me stand

Open my soul
Make me speak
Pull my secrets out
Then hold me as I cry

Lift me from the wreckage
Clean my wounds
Nurse me back to health
And take me home

Give me purpose
Teach me love
Drag away the darkness
Save me
This is my description of what a person needs when they want someone to help them from depression.

When I was in elementary school I suffered from severe depression and was sent to therapy. This is the kind of feelings I had as they tried to bring me back.

I'm probably the most proud of this poem than most of my others (which is saying something because I hate most of them), but I did have one problem:

Do the last lines of each section not match the previous three lines properly? Perhaps should have I put all the ending things into one section to close the entire thought?
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shaboogamoo Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
this is just perfect..
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wierdmonkeyperson Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much, and thank you for the favorite!
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shaboogamoo Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
keep up the good work :P
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wierdmonkeyperson Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
I'll be sure to try.
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shaboogamoo Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
no problem.. it captured how i feel, and i love it
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hatorhat Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2010  Hobbyist General Artist
I think that the last lines work well with each section. In each last sentence you either sum up your feelings or make a statement that really brings forth the atmosphere of your poem.

It's a really great peice that's concise but filled with emotion.
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wierdmonkeyperson Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Mm. Never though of it that way. Thank you very much, and thank you for the favorite!
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DeFruitBall Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2010
*sniffs*
So emotional...
Darling you have so much talent!
Elementary was crap...i actually suffered from supposed "major" depression in elementary school until grade 7, so
I know how horrible it must've been...
I feel like I've almost moved on from those issues at this point in my life,
Your words however, bring back the memories in such an artistic way
(which is good thing by the way, cuz you're writing is awe-sum! :D)
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wierdmonkeyperson Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
thankyu!

mhm, I used my own feelings for this one.
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DeFruitBall Featured By Owner Jun 22, 2010
:nod:
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